My first day at PES school

My first day at school.

As I slowly walked to the door number 16 with a smile of in basement was staying there as i approached the door. I had a big grin then I got to the door then it slowly dropped I open the door with anger and in basement because I did not want to leave my old school.

Then Uili came slowly with a grin on his face and said this is where you put your bag then I said with a serious face ok then it faded as it became morning tea.

Thin three boys came and said do you want to play hand ball I said yes I said with butterflies in my stomach I said what is your names well I was looking at the ground. one said Paris the other said Mikaiah and the last one was Uili just as they told me their names I well my name is sonny.

As we were playing handball some other kids came up to me and said do you want to play touch as I was still shy but not as shy as befor  I could not say yes I just stayed quiet . Then they walked of that was at lunch time. Then the bell went my butterflies came back because I was shy to go to class then the the kids said how old are you I was just looking at the computers thinking I have never seen that sort of computers in my life then I was going home to tell my dad about my shy but fun day.

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